King Lear
Aye you lot come here (whilst he says this he waves at Goneril,Cordelia and Regan to get their attention)
Now the mandem at em gonna holla ’bout who’s gonna get the most land.Send me the map and make it snappy.You’s lot know that we have divided the yard into three quaters.One of our youngers r gonna get the most land.Who’s up first?
Goneril
King Lear I respect you like that innit, I love you more than my eye sight and my liberty, i love you no less than life with grace health beauty and honour.
King Lear
your actually a moist a yout your like ” with grace beauty and honour
King Lear
Anyways,who’s up next. Reagan
Regan
King Lear I love you and you know that aswell but only you dont know how much i love you because you come too short.
King Lear
Great 2 speaches from your sisters but can you do any better cordelia. What do you have to say?
Cordelia
Nothing King Lear
King Lear
Nothing!!!
Cordelia
Nothing
King Lear
Trying to dis me or something
Cordelia
No
King Lear
So young, and so untender
Cordelia
So young, but so true
King Lear
Let it be the truth than the dower
If you were in King Lear’s shoe’s, who would you give the most land to?

February 19, 2016 at 3:34 pm
Abu, I like the way you have given the text a more urban feel. The speech of the characters has been adapted, but lots of the original meaning is still intact. Well done.
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3) Even though you are giving the characters slang language, you still need to spell it correctly or use apostrophes to show the missing letters (the accurate term for this is apostrophes of admission).
4) Can you make the characters’ names bold?
5) Every line should end with a full stop.
6) You have used some of Shakespeare’s original language and it jars with your own. Could you adapt this language so that the transition is less obvious?